I agree that the communiqué as it was adopted does not read like great
literature. That was at least partly a result of the limited time.
The original suggestion was divided very roughly into background
premises and conclusions, but the division was lost in the discussion.
Perhaps when it is reworked there might be a division along those
lines? (01)
I think that number 8 might come last, and as Mike suggests more
discussion of the anticipated benefits might come closely before that
"decision" point. (02)
Pat (03)
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The communiqué is fine as a starting point. Some comments and ideas for
improving and evolving it. (06)
* It is difficult to read this and glean the 1-3 really key point. For
example,
----the benefits of a shared UO are not clear,
----nor is the emphasis on articulating the similarities and
differences and inter-relationships.
It is all there, but not highlighted very well. (07)
* It suffers from the fact that no-one had a chance to look it over in
the large, we mostly focused on each statement on its own, or in
context of 1-2 others nearby.
It has some stylistic problems, easily fixed by some
word-smithing.
The order of points is fine in the large, but a clear story
does not really emerge. (08)
* It comes across a bit like motherhood, which may reflect that fact
that there was not that much that we could all actually agree on. To
address this, it may be good to clearly state the very important points
of DIS-agreement, and some pros/cons on the issues. (09)
Mike (010)
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